A Progress in Work

The bolded parts are areas I know need improvement. I would greatly appreciate input. I've not been able to think of substitutes and what not. Also, if you see other areas that can be improved, please let me know!

The mighty host of heaven watched,

As God declared the world to be,

And breathed in man the breath of life,

Then man did sin, fruit of the tree.

And so they saw throughout the years,

As God did work on earth a plan,

And fashioned history to make

Redemption for the fallen man.

They heard Him speak through many men

Who told a strange, prophetic cry

Of God to come and make man right,
And He man's sinful soul to buy.

And then a hush was spread, the host did wonder now,

for God had gone to earth, but not for knees to bow.

They sang a song of praise, for HE was born that night,

but wondered what He did, for it did not seem right.

They watched the Devil tempt the Lord as He was weak,

and wondered why the King did turn the other cheek.

Then awestruck did they see Him beaten, shamed with scorn.

And lo! upon His brow, a crown of thorns was worn.

And still they wondered why their God allowed this shame,

for Him to dwell with men, who'd curse His holy name.

But as the dawn approached the host began to see

That God’s great plan was done. Man, redeemed, could be.

Throughout history it’s clear,

That man is lost, no hope had he,

Till God Himself did pay the price.

Then man was saved, fruit of His tree.

Man’s own work will cost his life,

For 'gainst the King he’s two-syllables sinned

And the King will rightly judge,

No sentences will He rescind.

Your sentence is eternal hell,

Apart from God, forever death

But Jesus died, for you He paid,

And since it’s paid, He will forgive.

I Peter 1:12 - "To [the prophets] it was revealed that, not to themselves, but to us they were ministering the things which now have been reported to you through those who have preached the gospel to you by the Holy Spirit sent from heaven -- things which angels desire to look into."